Dira Sudis ([info]dsudis) wrote,
@ 2009-03-30 21:39:00
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Entry tags:bechdel test, fic post, sg-1

Stargate Fic: Sisters in Arms
Soooo I've been rewatching Stargate SG-1 from the beginning.

And inspired--or infected with a sanity-destroying meme--by [info]beccaelizabeth's post on counting speaking parts in Torchwood (there are charts! it's all kind of depressing!), I have been tracking the demographics of Stargate episodes as well as Bechdel test passes/fails.

They mostly fail.

So I've started writing fixits in which two women who were in the episode talk to each other about something other than a man.

I'm pretty embarrassed to realize that I don't think I've ever written fic that would pass that test before, and that it was sort of difficult, but anyway: here's my first try.


Stargate SG-1, during "Children of the Gods".
Sam and Sha're. PG. 983 words.
Thanks to [info]iuliamentis and [info]splash_the_cat for encouragement and beta!


Sisters in Arms

Sam liked being treated like one of the guys, or at least she'd trained herself to know it was a good sign. She liked good signs. Even when it was like this--Majors Kawalsky and Ferretti playing Sam's one of the guys, just us guys here, let's talk about guy stuff for all it was worth. Colonel O'Neill was doing a good imitation of not noticing she was there, or not noticing she was female, which she figured was his way of seeing whether she could handle it.

She could handle it. She knew all the words they were helping the Abydonian boys learn in English (Dr. Jackson had insisted that they had a fully adequate vocabulary for those topics already, thank you, and then gave up and started translating). She could have contributed a few creative expressions cooked up in the labs to describe literally astronomical levels of frustration and pressure, but Sam knew better than to get into that dick-measuring contest. She wasn't that much one of the guys, and even if she won, she'd lose.

Still, there was only so much sitting quietly and listening to locker room humor that she could do. Anyway, she really had to pee.

Sam got up as unobtrusively as she could. Kawalsky genuinely did seem to have forgotten she was there as he argued with Jackson about the exact usage of some obscenity or another. Ferretti gave her a friendly wink. The Colonel's eyes passed over her without lingering, but she was sure he'd know exactly how long she was gone, and in what direction she departed and from what direction she returned.

She was just glad she'd already put the important stuff in her pockets. Taking your purse with you to the restroom got a hell of a lot more obvious when your purse was a sixty-pound pack.

Sam nodded in the Colonel's direction, and he looked away, a dismissal as sharp as a salute. Sam turned on her heel and headed across the room, to where the Abydonian women--from Sha're to an old matriarch, and several others in between--were making supper, a few of them juggling babies as they cooked.

They were all chattering in Abydonian, but Sam thought Sha're, at least, must speak some English. Sam hadn't actually heard her speak yet, but Daniel had spoken to her and she'd understood.

Sam hesitated, out of arm's reach of the women, and then the oldest woman said something, nodding in her direction, and Sha're turned to face her.

"Sha're," Sam said, smiling nervously--beautiful women always made her a little nervous, even when she didn't need to ask awkward questions. "I was just wondering where to go, to, um--"

She made a vague crotch-ward gesture. "Where the women go."

She had figured out precisely where the guys went, by this point, and if it was that or the sandstorm Sam might just be tempted to try the sandstorm.

"Oh," Sha're said, and then turned and said something brief to the women, which caused them to all fall silent and look at Sam, and then at the men, and then resume talking in lowered voices. Sam felt herself blush a little--were toilet trips that interesting? Had she done something horribly wrong already?

"I will show you," Sha're said softly, brushing her hands off as she stood. She glanced past Sam's shoulder, toward the men, and then turned. "This way."

Sam followed her through a doorway, around a corner, and through another doorway, which led to a long corridor. The sound of the howling wind was muffled now. Sha're fell into step beside her and said, "You carry a weapon, like the men of Earth. You dress as they do."

Sam glanced down at the MP5 slung across her chest; she'd stopped noticing it sometime in the last hour. As for the clothes--maybe it was just Sam being hopeless about fashion, but she really didn't see that much difference between the robes the women and men wore on Abydos. She was probably missing some nuances, just as much as Sha're was missing the cute-yet-comfy underwear under Sam's camouflage.

"That's the way it is, among our people," Sam said. "Women and men work alongside one another. We receive the same educations, and women as well as men can join our military--the woman who was taken from us by Apophis, she was like me, a member of the Air Force."

Sam had never met her--she'd been new to the Cheyenne Mountain facility since Sam had had a reason to visit--but she'd stared at the sergeant's photo for a long time when she read the file. If it had happened back when Sam was working on the gate dialing computers, she'd have been no further from the event horizon than the sergeant had been. It could have been her the aliens grabbed, a few years ago.

"But she was not able to defend herself against them," Sha're said.

"No, not outnumbered like that. No one could," Sam agreed. "But she might still be alive, at least. That's more than we can say for the rest of her squad."

Sam glanced over at Sha're, to see her looking away. Up until a year ago her people had been under the thumb of Ra; God knew what she was thinking about, knowing there was another one out there like him.

"It's different here?" Sam asked. "Women aren't allowed to fight?"

Sha're looked up at that, and gave a wry smile--not the least bit downtrodden, not remotely oppressed and seeking to be made free, not again. She looked proud, and weary, and said only, "We have our own battles. We carry other weapons."

Sam figured she'd have plenty of time to learn what Sha're meant by that; she couldn't imagine they'd have any luck taking Dr. Jackson back to Earth without his wife.




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[info]missmollyetc
2009-03-31 02:52 am UTC (link)
Yes! I love this little bit. I like the careful balance you've struck between Sam and Sha're where they each have their strengths and that's okay. Yay girls!

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[info]dsudis
2009-03-31 06:48 pm UTC (link)
Thank you! Yay Sam and Sha're indeed!

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[info]fairmer
2009-03-31 03:19 am UTC (link)
This is a very cool fic series concept. Noice!

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[info]dsudis
2009-03-31 06:48 pm UTC (link)
Thanks!

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[info]unicornvamp3z
2009-03-31 03:55 am UTC (link)
awesome!

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[info]dsudis
2009-03-31 06:48 pm UTC (link)
Thank you!

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[info]jessikast
2009-03-31 05:01 am UTC (link)
Just finished a two year marathon through every Stargate SG1 ep. And so I say: MOAR FIC NAO PLZ.

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[info]dsudis
2009-03-31 06:49 pm UTC (link)
Yay! There's definitely more in the pipeline. :)

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[info]sg_fignewton
2009-03-31 11:03 am UTC (link)
Oh, how much I want these two to get to really know each other!

Great stuff.

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[info]dsudis
2009-03-31 06:50 pm UTC (link)
Thanks! I was briefly stumped on when they'd even have had a chance to talk, and I was so glad to find a spot where they had at least a little time.

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[info]madripoor_rose
2009-03-31 12:59 pm UTC (link)
Very nice.

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[info]dsudis
2009-03-31 06:50 pm UTC (link)
Thank you!

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[info]indywind
2009-03-31 02:21 pm UTC (link)
What a cool idea, fixit-ing the fails to help the SG realize its potential better than the writers/casting director/etc. has done.

(saving the fic to read for lunch)

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[info]dsudis
2009-04-02 04:15 pm UTC (link)
Thanks! I'm having fun with it. :)

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[info]nandamai
2009-03-31 04:45 pm UTC (link)
Ooooh. All sorts of nice insights in this. I like.

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[info]dsudis
2009-04-02 04:16 pm UTC (link)
Thank you!

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[info]browngirl
2009-03-31 06:10 pm UTC (link)
Gorgeously written. *applauds*

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[info]dsudis
2009-04-02 04:16 pm UTC (link)
Thank you! *curtseys*

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[info]liraelsays
2009-03-31 08:18 pm UTC (link)
Lovely story, and a wonderful concept for a series of stories. :)

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[info]dsudis
2009-04-02 04:17 pm UTC (link)
Thank you! :)

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[info]thady
2009-04-01 08:11 pm UTC (link)
Wonderful story. :)

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[info]dsudis
2009-04-02 04:17 pm UTC (link)
Thanks! :)

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[info]ticketsonmyself
2009-04-02 05:32 am UTC (link)
Fixits per the Bechdel-Wallace Rule = excellent series premise! Have you seen The Bechdel Test Movie List? I haven't gone through many of the listings yet, but it might be an interesting database.

I call up the Rule just about every time I watch or read something, along with race-Bechdel (1. at least two characters of colour 2. who talk to each other 3. about something other than a white person) and race-Bechdel squared (1. at least two women of colour 2. who talk to each other 3. about something other than a white person [or other than a man of color, for that matter—I look for this too]). As a woman of color, I have conversations that meet the conditions of all these tests pretty much all the time, so it's often depressing/enraging to see how much more whitecentric and/or whitewashed and malecentric the narratives so much of popular culture sells us—emphasis on sells, with all it palpably costs—than say, actual life is. But of course I'd rather stay aware than let it sink in without thinking about it! Cultural products kind of fail for a lot of us when their narratives as texts themselves reinforce/endorse/capitulate to, implicitly or explicitly, the same forces of institutionalized, day-to-day oppression that have such a powerful hand in our lives.

I like the way Sam's conscious of the Sam's one of the guys, just us guys here, let's talk about guy stuff treatment and what it means, even in a friendly way—kind of like in Terry Pratchett's Feet of Clay when Angua says, "It's like that in the Watch, too. You can be any sex you like provided you act male. There's no men and women in the Watch, just a bunch of lads"!—and how Sam's needed to train herself to see it as a good sign (for a very specific value of good in that context).

She wasn't that much one of the guys, and even if she won, she'd lose. Yep.

I love your characterization of Jack, and Sam, and especially Sha're: Sha're looked up at that, and gave a wry smile--not the least bit downtrodden, not remotely oppressed and seeking to be made free, not again. She looked proud, and weary, and said only, "We have our own battles. We carry other weapons." Just YES. I love that whole conversation, from Sam remembering how she'd stared at the photo right on to the end... so (doubly) poignant. I'm definitely looking forward to seeing how you continue with this series!

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[info]dsudis
2009-04-02 04:26 pm UTC (link)
Thank you! I've been tracking both Bechdel and Race-Bechdel as I rewatch--I made a chart for season 1, but I'm going away for the weekend and I don't want to post it and then disappear. It's been... pretty faily, so far.

I'm glad you enjoyed the story! It was really cool writing Sam and Sha're, and I'm looking forward to writing them more. :)

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[info]_minxy_
2009-04-03 04:44 pm UTC (link)
Oh, gorgeous. I am in complete support of Bechdel Test fic! And Sha're being that fierce/innocent character she was (before becoming a quest object) and Sam being fierce/unsure of her place. Wonderful.

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[info]dsudis
2009-04-06 03:05 am UTC (link)
Thank you! I enjoyed writing this, and I hope to write more about both Sam and Sha're. :)

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[info]settiai
2009-04-08 05:37 pm UTC (link)
This is a lovely scene. :)

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[info]dsudis
2009-04-10 03:11 am UTC (link)
Thank you! :)

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[info]aurora_novarum
2009-04-08 08:19 pm UTC (link)
Oh what a lovely moment between them!

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[info]dsudis
2009-04-10 03:11 am UTC (link)
Thank you!

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[info]fairyglass
2009-04-08 10:04 pm UTC (link)
This was a fantastic moment between two very powerful women. If only the show had been written more like this.

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[info]dsudis
2009-04-10 03:17 am UTC (link)
Thank you! It was really fun to write these two together, and I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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[info]katcorvi
2009-04-09 11:57 pm UTC (link)
Great story and this makes me very sad that we didn't get more of this on the show. Thanks for writing the fixit.

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[info]dsudis
2009-04-10 03:26 am UTC (link)
Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed this! Writing the fixits has been a really interesting exercise for me.

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[info]lokei
2009-04-10 04:43 pm UTC (link)
I love the idea of a whole set of missing scenes to fill in the missing viewpoint. That's fantastic. And I agree with several others already on the comment list: I so want Sam to get a chance to know Sha're, and it's such a pity she doesn't in canon!

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[info]dsudis
2009-04-14 12:40 am UTC (link)
Thank you!

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[info]normaltrouble
2009-04-15 05:23 am UTC (link)
This is going to be one my favorite series, I can tell..and you do make the point of the laziness of the writers, or maybe that very few women were/are involved on the writing/directing etc side of SG1.

A writer could easily find out the most plot moving, or character arc building 1-2 minutes* here...and from your other Shar'e and Jessica one...and help flesh out the whole story, giving it some more depth of field.

Thanks !

( I read my comment over, and see how SG1 has us thinking- I'd be happy for only 4-5 minutes of womencentric scenes each episode...because it would build and make such a difference...sigh. )
*considering how stingy a TV script is anyway...

Edited at 2009-04-15 05:26 am UTC

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[info]dsudis
2009-04-15 02:23 pm UTC (link)
Thank you! For a while I was tracking the writers/directors along with the episodes, and I think in season one there was only one female writer--some of her episodes were better than the average, but I think she also wrote "Emancipation" which was a mind-boggling level of fail on some levels, so.

(And, yes. One does learn to set the standard low.)

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[info]normaltrouble
2009-04-21 03:07 am UTC (link)
Can I possibly link to your Bechdel SG-1 story tag?

I was watching State of Playand noticing where it failed this.
It does okay in presenting 2 women who have careers moving forward, there is another woman character who is a bit of a cypher*, maybe that whole role was slightly skewed because it took me out of the movie for a few moments...

And of course, I was musing that if say, for instance Michelle Pfeiffer let herself "go" like Russell Crowe (as in looking more like an average Joe or Joan, which was fine by me...) did--would she get a lead role?
But never mind.

I'd like to link to your series.

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[info]dsudis
2009-04-21 03:10 am UTC (link)
You're completely welcome to link to the tag! Thank you!

(I do notice the same thing--doing these statistics is really affecting the way I watch other stuff.)

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[info]grav_ity
2009-04-21 02:29 pm UTC (link)
So...Apophis and the Goa'uld don't count as men? (I am not trying to be a jerk, I am just curious about how this works.)

Anyway, I really like this idea! Sometimes fandom makes my head hurt, but this is important, and I am glad you're taking the time to watch, record and write about it. :)

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[info]dsudis
2009-04-21 02:33 pm UTC (link)
*grins*

Well, it was my first effort, and I wasn't sure it entirely succeeded either. I found it more difficult than I probably should have to get Sam and Sha're to have a conversation that didn't in some way relate to men.

Anyway, thanks for commenting!

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