Around the point where the sleepwalkers started forming mobs and attacking people I began to have the very strong sensation that I was reading a rehash of Newsflesh, and that sensation did not leave me. To wit:
I also found Sal incredibly frustrating as a protagonist--it's not just that the whole book seems to be 500 pages of the protagonist finding out the premise of the book, it's that Sal doesn't do anything. I think that rescuing Beverly by calling her away from her owner is the only courageous unforced action Sal actually takes. It's the one time you see her know and understand something and act based on her own best understanding of a situation. She does also, four hundred pages later, act courageously to go steal information she doesn't know anything about or understand after she's been bullied into doing so by Tansy and, by extension, Dr. Cale. Everything else in the book is stuff that happens to her, and do not even tell me she made a choice to ~enter the broken doors~ because that was so manipulated and such a blind choice and also I am 1000% done with that twee-creepy Monsters Inc. fanfic children's book, STOP BEING A CENTRAL PLOT POINT. STOP RHYMING. JUST STOP.
Relatedly, I suspect that Seanan finds Tansy a lot more entertaining than I do.
I am in this position where Sal is sympathetic and understandable enough as a person that I feel bad about saying I don't love her, but that's the biggest reason I have for saying I love her as a character. She's someone I feel bad for. That's not a great relationship to have with a protagonist for 500 pages.
Also I'm pretty sure the Adam-Tansy-Sherman timeline makes no sense, but I'm too annoyed by the book to actually go check the textev: I'm pretty sure Adam is introduced as two years old, Tansy as one and a half, but then Sherman, who was created to compare to Tansy, is from six months before Sal's accident, so he's ... six and a half?
Also also the way Sal's dad's workplace is revealed as USAMRIID, and Sal's dad is revealed to be an Army Colonel, just felt like a weird pointless reveal of something that didn't need to be a reveal. It made me perceive him, and the family dynamics, very differently right at the moment where he became apparent as an Awful Parent, and it just didn't seem necessary. As someone who is constantly trying to write unnecessarily coy reveals which my betas then have to force me to just exposit normally, I get the impulse, but after reading this particular one I also get why my betas keep taking them away from me.
Also seriously please stop with the twee rhyming children's book IT WAS A BETTER PLOT POINT ON SIX FEET UNDER AND I DIDN'T HAVE TO READ HALF OF IT BETWEEN CHAPTERS.
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